Rate my first map?

[Xybob]

I've been putting this on Custom games for a while, and people are loving it. It's my first map, so I'm completely open to criticism (constructive, mind you) and compliments alike. Its name is "Despair Below" because of the despair the underground tunnel brings to both teams (the way to the artifact for Defence, and the trap for Offense). Please play and rate. Thanks!

I'll be putting this up from time to time on the custom game section, but if you want to play it yourself, the code is as follows:

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Please do NOT attempt to pass this off as your own. Thanks for reading, and I hope you have fun playing!

Here's an updated map-editor view of the map. Some things (the way into the passage, for one) cannot be seen.

I added some things, such as:

*A new, harder jump (including a trap) for the trapping reds. Nothing too hard though
*The blues lost a spawn that was too far away, and I moved a far away spawn that now lets them take full advantage of the trap
*Removed the ledge that reds could use to get a cheap shot at the artifact
*Added a little fall-in pit on the red side, used for escaping from battle right to an Ammo Box
*Decorated a little

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v233/xybob/PawnMap-3.jpg

NEW MAP!

I call it: Combat Squared.

Sucky name =(

Anyways, it's a small map, but because of the two seperated sections, it can easily hold 10 people.

Pic:

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v233/xybob/PawnMapTwo.png

Code is as follows: (Oh, and again; Please don't take this)

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[Tsubasa]

pretty good. I give it an 8 outa 10

[Xybob]

pretty good. I give it an 8 outa 10

Thanks! Any ways I can improve it?

[Accester]

i give it a 8 outta 10 to. great job on it.

[redthunder]

same thing yall :D XD 8 out of 10

[Xybob]

Thanks guys! :D

So do you have any suggestions on how to improve it?

[Strelok12]

like everyone...8/10

[Xybob]

like everyone...8/10

Lol, lotsa 8/10's. I'm still looking for some constructive criticism though :P

[SxS]

hm pretty good.
7/10:)

[drunkamigos7]

it is pretty good

[Xybob]

Thanks everybody, but SERIOUSLY: Does anybody have any ways I could improve it?

Oh, and I added another map.

[Omni]

the gap on the bottom left of the screen shouldnt exist...you fail to make the jump and you are stuck there
And it seems too open for an assault map, looks more like a Deathmatch map
Assault maps are tight and deadly

[Xybob]

the gap on the bottom left of the screen shouldnt exist...you fail to make the jump and you are stuck there
And it seems too open for an assault map, looks more like a Deathmatch map
Assault maps are tight and deadly

The point I have that there is because without it, it's too easy to get to the other base.

BTW: I acknowledge that, and mine is tight and deadly because it mostly focuses on that tunnel, but I have the open spaces in case the Blue's decide to camp, or its very crowded.

Thanks!

[Omni]

The point I have that there is because without it, it's too easy to get to the other base.

BTW: I acknowledge that, and mine is tight and deadly because it mostly focuses on that tunnel, but I have the open spaces in case the Blue's decide to camp, or its very crowded.

Thanks!

That doesnt mean anything...make the tunnel smaller then so you have to crawl but if you have a gap where if you fall in and you cant get out people will hate you for it and give bad thoughts after playing the map.
and the tunnel isnt the only way to get to the artifact. you can simply get a protogun and fire at it from below next to the ammo crate

[Xybob]

That doesnt mean anything...make the tunnel smaller then so you have to crawl but if you have a gap where if you fall in and you cant get out people will hate you for it and give bad thoughts after playing the map.
and the tunnel isnt the only way to get to the artifact. you can simply get a protogun and fire at it from below next to the ammo crate

Alright, I changed it =)

[Puffer]

if it wasent a firsty map i would give it a 2/10..but since it is ur first map..4/10...the gamelplay in this map aint that great:rolleyes::rolleyes:

[JediLucas5]

nice maps 8/10 look fun to play, nice creativity

[Xybob]

if it wasent a firsty map i would give it a 2/10..but since it is ur first map..4/10...the gamelplay in this map aint that great:rolleyes::rolleyes:

Any reasons?

nice maps 8/10 look fun to play, nice creativity

Thanks! Any criticism?