The New Writer's Guild of Pawngame

[Eiliosdraye]

Ruled by an iron hand of the late tyrant, the dark side of Eiliosdraye, the Writers Guild assumed a quick rule over the General Discussion. Unfortunately, what goes up, must go down. It was quickly bombed by inactivity, and the cofounder dying, Pawn's Hammer - it's greatest project, dying with it. Soon, the guild became a dying dream, leeching the last amount of intelligence out of the slowly dying forum, taking the last hope it has and channelling it into one place, one all-powerful, well loved place. The Writer's Guild falling seriously injured pawngame. E-crime was all high, and riddled with guilt, Eiliosdraye committed a murder suicide. Fresh out of the hospital from a strike from a police officer by the Ban-Hammer, Eiliosdraye recovered, and vowed to recreate his guild.

-The Book of Eilios

The Writer's Guild of Pawngame
Founded 2009, by Eiliosdraye

Hello, my name is Eiliosdraye. I am Pawngame's one and only Linux fanatic, original founder of the Writer's Guild, and resident pseudo-troll. It is my honour to present to you, the New Writer's Guild of Pawngame.

With enough attention, and your persistence, we might make this into a thriving usergroup, writing stories, guides, anything to keep the forum active, all using our intellect. In the mean time, we are a rag-tag group of high posters, low posters, any poster who is willing to take Pawngame to it's former glory, the 2007 days, when we all had shining examples to guide us into the legends we are inevitably going to become. The same shining examples that guided me to bring Pawngame to it's new generation.

How to get in? Simple, you must pass the test. The theme is "Dimension XI14", which is a universe setting, which involves using a universe created in another Guildmate's story. Of course, Dimension Xi14 is not out yet, so you will need to learn the basics. Alternatively, you may use a Romance theme.


Your next post will explain it all, it will be done by my young apprentice, FartingHippo.


Once you past the test, you are immediately called a Guildmate, and are free to join the Writer's Guild group. We will chat in there, discuss writing, and discuss guides that need to be written, be it a PG guide, a PT guide, a tech guide, or simply a thread you want stickied.

We only have 5 simple rules.


Do not be stupid.
Do not release your work without pre-reading. Also, Rule 4 is not a real rule, it is just there to make Twilight haters annoyed. This will be in the application. Look at rule 3.
Do not consider joining without absolute knowledge you will pass. If you are doubtful, you can the answer is rule 7 try, but don't expect anything. If you know you will succeed, you WILL succeed.
Do not diss Twilight. This is our most important rule.
Do not hate on other Guildmates. They are your friends.


From the start, you are a rookie, a lackey in Guildmate terms, if you did not get above 80% to pass to fresh blood. A lackey must make careful use of his talents, as he must get above 50% to pass(anything above 30% warrants a retry), and from there, it is up to him to do jobs for other Guildmates. For example, if a fresh blood wants you to do a report on say, Ubuntu 9.10 release, you should do it, because if a higher rank who issued you a job says you did it well, you are promoted instantly.

From fresh blood you go up to unsung bard, and from there you earn your freedom. An unsung bard only takes orders from me. Finally, you can become a master writer, and you can order fresh bloods around if you need a job done at the top quality. A hand is the utmost of power you can be promoted to you, if your writing is amazing, you are a hand, and have the ability to post a "sponsored story", which will be posted in the main thread, giving you free advertising.


To join, here is your application.


What is your username(newline):



What experience do you have?:



Why do you want to join the Writer's Guild?



Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can result in being barred for the group completely?:



What is the most important rule?:


Finally, post your application.
The Dimension XI14 universe cheatsheet will give you a basic howto on how to write your application(story). I expect it to be at least 30 lines(use preview).

[FartingHippo]

Hello! I am FartingHippo, an alternate username of Eiliosdraye, and a hand of the Guild. It's my honor to present to you the cheatsheet, the thing that tells you everything about Dimension XI14.


In Dimension XI14, everything is ruled by the Caltraps, a bunch of all-powerful beings, they enslave humans and use them as slave labourers, they are master aimers, but very, very stupid. Even though they can fly, and can snipe you with a rock, they are extremely stupid, and survive off brute force. A basta(c)rd race, the Goblins, are cross-breeds from humans and Caltraps. They are all mute, and rely on the hand signals they use. Due to this, they are useless in the dark, and are easily ambushed. However, they are as strong as Caltraps, and as smart as humans. Their numbers are few, but they are a threat to Caltraps. The Imperials, an army of all powerful humans who are very stern defend their self from the Caltraps with crossbows and other weapons, and can fight them toe-to-toe due to their armour, but they are afraid of the Caltraps, as their armour has a weak point in the back, so they can only defend, any offence whatsoever will end up in death. Finally, the Empire, an army of technologically advanced warriors, armed with Steam Guns(guns powered by steam) are trying to get the Imperial guns, they are like the Illuminati, the Imperial oracles knew guns would destroy the world.

Finally, the rebels, a bunch of the remnants of the once great Sylvan Nation, highly mobile soldiers, are trying to kill the Goblins, who they believe are evil. In the middle of it all is the demigod Neal, owning an army he calls the "Knights of Less", a joke on how all of the armies are massive in comparison to them. He wants to take over the world, and is stopped by the reclusive Wizards of Lazhi. Neal can be taken down by the wizards, who are all-powerful, but extremely weak against projectiles, which can pierce through their shields. All of them are against Neal, who is the antagonist, the Caltraps are merely bandits, the Goblins are more or less shamanistic tribes, very scattered, the Empire is like England, very powerful, but closed in, the Imperials are like the French, large army, but not as advanced, the rebels are like the Apache warriors, they are stealthy and quick, and the Wizards are more or less scholars who have the most powerful weapon in the dimension.

Next up, Mana, a particle wizards learn to use, and Neal just born knowing how to abuse it, due to this, he has no wisdom on safe usage, and as such does not fear for his safety, making him VERY powerful(wizards are taught how to avoid collateral damage), and acting on instinct instead of training, he found out how to make his knights immune to his magical blasts, which is why he can take out the Wizards(Neal uses fire primarily, the metal is fireproof). Mana can be compressed to "coat" an object in whatever charge it is used(it can be charged with anything the user can do) and it will bind to the object, so you can compress it around a sword to make it catch fire when you flex it(thinking the thought used during creation, usually a word).

Go nuts, we have no characters EXCEPT Neal. Make it up as you go along.

[Eiliosdraye]

List of members

Guild Leader


Eiliosdraye

Hands


FartingHippo(Eiliosdraye's Contest Announcer)

Master Writer


Unsung Bard


Fresh Blood


lackey


Of course, you may also want to be a critic, which is why Quantice made this great application for Critiquing other Writer's newest pieces. The Critics will gain perks as well.


What is your Username?:

Age?:

What experience do you have as a critic?:

Why do you want to join the writers guild as a critic?:

Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can result in being barred for the group completely?:

Do you think you can help authors in the guild improve their work?:

Rules for being a critic

1. No immature comments. Post constructive responses that can help the author improve upon their work.

2. No flaming over a persons short story, poem, etc.

3. Don't post ridiculous critiuqe such as "TL;DR" or "this story sucks". Actually post what is wrong with their story/poem etc.


Critic Ranks

Lead Critic


Quantice

Master of Criticsm

Expert Critic

Critic
New Blood

ranting old man



The perks are fairly simple, the Lead Critic chooses who gets to be Critics, the Expert Critic has the ability to rate new entries(and possibly deny apps), the Critic has the ability to rate current pieces, which can deny them from being considered worthy of promotion, the New Blood has the ability to rate pieces BUT any other critic higher can veto if it's unfair, the ranting old man is just an advisor and has no privileges in the guild.

[Toast]

Sounds interesting. So you guys (and girls?) are going to write fiction based on the universe that you just created in that post? If so, it looks like it has much potential. Will the best posts be public? I look forward to reading these.

[Eiliosdraye]

Sounds interesting. So you guys (and girls?) are going to write fiction based on the universe that you just created in that post? If so, it looks like it has much potential. Will the best posts be public? I look forward to reading these.
Yes Freezer, but every month we change the application theme. We also write guides for sections that need them(and PT), and generally help everybody out. The idea is that if we keep writing things, people will keep active because they want to wait for what comes next in their favourite series, or if they want a new clan guide, or other similar things.

[RaptorZ]

What is your username(newline):

QQQ

What experience do you have?:

I have won two straight speech contests at my school, you know the thing where you write about a topic, then give a 5 minute long speech on it?

Why do you want to join the Writer's Guild?

I want people out there to be Enlightened by my Writing, and know that i can write.

Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can result in being barred for the group completely?:

Yep, as you and I both know Breaking rules results in a ban, and BTW you spelled Banned wrong.

What is the most important rule?:

Number Four, dont diss Twilight, besides the first two books.


EDIT: I see your using my Pic Magnester.

[maggerz]

I think it needs at least two more topics to talk about. More diversity.

[Eiliosdraye]

What is your username(newline):

QQQ

What experience do you have?:

I have won two straight speech contests at my school, you know the thing where you write about a topic, then give a 5 minute long speech on it?

Why do you want to join the Writer's Guild?

I want people out there to be Enlightened by my Writing, and know that i can write.

Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can result in being barred for the group completely?:

Yep, as you and I both know Breaking rules results in a ban, and BTW you spelled Banned wrong.

What is the most important rule?:

Number Four, dont diss Twilight, besides the first two books.
Denied, you didn't read the rules.
Also, I meant "barred".
Edit: Mag, that's a great idea, if you can come up with a topic, I will use it.

[Xenu]

Lol I remember the old Guild. O: I was in that :D


What is your username(newline):
OGSauce/OGCrookedO


What experience do you have?:
I can write a good story if I set my mind to doing it. I used to write pretty good ones in my time in high school.


Why do you want to join the Writer's Guild?
I was in the first one, and I think the forums need something to keep these people entertained.


Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can result in being barred for the group completely?:
Basically, yes.


What is the most important rule?:
Rule 1?

[Eiliosdraye]

Lol I remember the old Guild. O: I was in that :D


What is your username(newline):
OGSauce/OGCrookedO


What experience do you have?:
I can write a good story if I set my mind to doing it. I used to write pretty good ones in my time in high school.


Why do you want to join the Writer's Guild?
I was in the first one, and I think the forums need something to keep these people entertained.


Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can result in being barred for the group completely?:
Basically, yes.


What is the most important rule?:
Rule 1?
Eh, you didn't completely fail, I always use that as my post important rule...

Write a short story using the setting FartingHippo used, and we'll see which rank you get. Lackey, or Fresh Blood.

[imnotanoob]

What is your username(newline):

ImNotANoob

What experience do you have?:

I've written short stories and poetry.

Why do you want to join the Writer's Guild?

To write and discuss writing.

Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can result in being barred for the group completely?:

Yes.

What is the most important rule?:

Don't diss Twilight.

[Toast]

What is your username(newline):
Freezerburn (durr)

What experience do you have?:
I haven't failed AP/pre-AP English yet.

Why do you want to join the Writer's Guild?
I need an outlet to write through. The open-ended topics will help spark ideas for me. And I feel like being a part of the return of PG's General Discussion.

Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions (very hard to do) can result in being barred from the group completely?:
Yah (I edited some mistakes in the question)

What is the most important rule?:
Rule 3

[Eiliosdraye]

What is your username(newline):

ImNotANoob

What experience do you have?:

I've written short stories and poetry.

Why do you want to join the Writer's Guild?

To write and discuss writing.

Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can result in being barred for the group completely?:

Yes.

What is the most important rule?:

Don't diss Twilight.

Sorry, you didn't read the rules. Since I know you can write very well(you are a great comedy writer), i'll let you try again in 3 days.

@ freezer: Accepted, write a story with the current theme to determine your rank.

[wut]

What is your username(newline):

CaptainPlanet



What experience do you have?: I was in the old guild



Why do you want to join the Writer's Guild?:

I like to write.



Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can result in being barred for the group completely?:

Sure.

What is the most important rule?:

Don't make fun of twilight because its supar lol winzor..

[Toast]

Can I send it to you tomorrow morning? It'll take a while to get character names and a general idea of what I want to write about.

[Eiliosdraye]

What is your username(newline):

CaptainPlanet



What experience do you have?: I was in the old guild



Why do you want to join the Writer's Guild?:

I like to write.



Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can result in being barred for the group completely?:

Sure.

What is the most important rule?:

Don't make fun of twilight because its supar lol winzor..
I caught you before the edit, lol.

Denied, wait 3 days and reread the rules. Sorry, you are my friend, but the rules apply for everyone.


EDIT: Take your time with the stories, you have forever and ever and ever.

[wut]

i caught you before the edit, lol.

Denied, wait 3 days and reread the rules. Sorry, you are my friend, but the rules apply for everyone.


Edit: Take your time with the stories, you have forever and ever and ever.

k .

D:

[Quantooce]

Are there "jobs" assigned to different guildmates depending on rank?

[Timeline]

Hey, Timeline here.

What experience do you have?: I have written several short stories described by teachers and colleagues as elegant, and well written. I have submitted my works in writing contests, but unfortunately, I have not won one yet. Also, I wrote a speech regarding the stock market game for a bunch of rich people in their 50's, they were blown away.

Why do you want to join the Writer's Guild? I believe that this could be a fun and useful group for I and other users to hone our writing skills, as well as get some experience with leadership, and responsibility.

Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can result in being barred for the group completely?: That seems fair to me, so yes, I am completely aware.

What is the most important rule?: Rule number one, don't be stupid.. this not only applies to this group, but to life.

[Eiliosdraye]

Are there "jobs" assigned to different guildmates depending on rank?
Yes, higher ranks can boss around the lower ranks, as well as higher ranks get more "perks" in the guild, such as getting their stories linked on the first post, and I will give them little things I want done but are to lazy to do.

EDIT: Timeline is accepted with pardon, his application was amazing, so i'll overlook his error, but the "with pardon" means you need to get above 60%, and get above 50% to be given a reapply. Fresh blood is still the same.

[Quantooce]

So, to be in the guild, you have to be a writer? What about a critic?

[Eiliosdraye]

So, to be in the guild, you have to be a writer? What about a critic?
Good idea! Help write a critic application, i'm working on a sample entry.

[Quantooce]

Good idea! Help write a critic application, i'm working on a sample entry.

Alright, then.

What is your Username?:

Age?:

What experience do you have as a critic?:

Why do you want to join the writers guild as a critic?:

Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can result in being barred for the group completely?:

Do you think you can help authors in the guild improve their work?:

Rules for being a critic

1. No immature comments. Post constructive responses that can help the author improve upon their work.

2. No flaming over a persons short story, poem, etc.

3. Don't post ridiculous critiuqe such as "TL;DR" or "this story sucks". Actually post what is wrong with their story/poem etc.

Is this okay?

[Eiliosdraye]

My pseudo-entry


"Ready!" shouted the captain as I pulled back on my bow-string, ready to fire.


"Aim!" he shouted again, and I did as commanded.



"FIRE!!" He screamed now, and the damned Caltraps heard us. I laughed as our arrows pierced their ranks, watched as they screamed in misery, watched as they were punished for their crimes against nature. They would pay for taking our home from us, they would pay dearly.



This thought emboldened me, as I drew my long sword, and jumped from the tree I was hiding in. The Caltrap screamed in a subtle mix of hatred, agony, and pure stupidity, and charged me. Stupid beast. I held my sword at neck point, and charged. Little sucker thought I was challenging it, or at least until my throat pierced it's neck, and it's lifeblood splattered on the floor. I looked at it's eyes and said, simply, "You are dead,". It looked back at me, honoured to lose to a more skilled opponent, then died.



"Siris! Stop with the small fry, we have a Major coming at you! Oh, and duck!" my captain said, I did as told, and a rock missed my head by an inch. I let out an Elven war-cry, and charged the Major. It's green skin seemed to ripple with it's enraged bellow, and it charged, holding a makeshift club made out of a stump and a sharp piece of metal. It swung at me, I nimbly dodged and thrusted a knife into it's leg. It's two times my size and going down. It laughed off the pain, and swung at an odd angle, very slowly, but obviously with great force. I jumped over, and tripped it as it was stepping towards me for a headbutt. It fell on the ground where Tes jumped it, and stabbed it with knives.



"This could take awhile, cover me!" shouted Tessil, I agreed.

Soon, the Caltraps, seeing their leader down were enraged, and decided it was a good time to take me and Tes out. I pulled out my shortbow, and felt the wood. So good, I missed the forests, but a voice snapped me back to the unpleasant truth, that it was gone, and I needed to protect Tessil. More Caltraps jumped out, and then the problem escalated. They outnumbered us 4 to 1, and we were surrounded. Now it was a fair fight, and that was not in our favour.



The Caltraps threw rocks around me in a circular motion, and I screamed for Tes to duck. Several Caltraps were hit by their own teammates, causing them to charge enraged. I sighed, and laughed aloud at the stupidity of these things, pinched some Terri Powder, and threw it at the ground. Smoke filled the air immediately, our eyes were trained to deal with it, and I quickly snapped about 3 necks, left my other knife in a Caltrap's throat, and only one was there, and the smoke was clearing. It grinned in that evil grin only a demonic being can do, and swung at me.



That was no Caltrap. Suddenly, I realized why this one's stomps were too quiet, too planned. This was a goblin. I quickly adapted my tactics, planning to use it's stupidity against it was no good, I feinted with my dagger, then slapped it with my sword. Enraged, it charged at me, and made it's first mistake. Never close the distance with an elf. I threw some powder in it's face, temporarily blinding it as the smoke filled it's body, and shoved the rest in it's mouth. Goblin's skin is too tough for these wimpy swords, I thought to myself, as the Goblin's stomach acid mixed with the smoke chemically and burned a hole through it's wind pipe and head. It couldn't breathe, and eventually fell over. By then, the Caltraps were gone, scared that their leader was out. It was a minor victory, but for a new recruit it was damn impressive. If I didn't get a medal of intelligence for this, I don't know what I would get.

[maggerz]

Edit: Mag, that's a great idea, if you can come up with a topic, I will use it.

How about a War topic, and a General, and maybe Romance?

[Eiliosdraye]

How about a War topic, and a General, and maybe Romance?
General is too vague, but i'll do Romance.

[Timeline]

It's a little short, but here is my entry. It's more lines in a standard twelve font word processor. I like it :]

_____

I fumbled around me 5x9 cell, sparsely furnished with the gnawed bones of those who didn't survive, trying to find my one true possession of worth. The very item that had truly gotten me imprisoned in this death box, a diamond. But this is no ordinary diamond, it's the only diamond.

Many years ago the Caltraps discovered that using diamonds as a source of energy could bring them to power, and they were certainly correct. Every year for hundreds of years a diamond ring was placed in the central power cell, that gave power to all of their weapons, and machinery. And after so many years of this behavior, diamonds became rare and even more valuable.

My brethren have been forced for centuries to work as slaves searching for diamonds to power our own oppressors, and I did not need to think when I saw that glimmering speck of hope juxtaposed greatly with the blackness of the mine, I just acted. I quickly checked around for Caltraps, then took my pickax and cleared away the debris surrounding it as fast as I could. I swallowed the diamond and stole a piece of gold from another slave, just then, the lunch bell rang and the new shift shuffled in. I quickly made my way towards the exit and walked through the mineral detector, which rewarded me with a loud beeping noise. I was swiftly knocked over the head with an electric mace.

When I woke up, I found myself sitting in this little box, with the piece of gold confiscated from my left cargo pocket, but my organs and digestive tract safely intact.. this is Dimension XI14.

[Xenu]

Here is my entry:

With a well placed barrage of arrow, the front lines of the Wizard army collapse, and chaos runs through their ranks. They quickly break file and begin running around, aiming at targets that are not there, and slowly getting picked off in remorseless fashion. Watching the horrors being unleashed on his enemy, Neal breaks off into a long and thunderous laugh that can be heard even though all the horrific screams of the maimed soldiers of the Wizard army. Although outnumbered 12 to 1, the Knights of Less have rained hell on the Wizards of Lazhi, completely overwhelming their inferior defenses and all but annihilating them from their homeland in Northern Begnion.

The land being fought for seems worthless to most, but Neal knows that if he can take it, he will have a open route to the Caltraps, where he can begin a guerrilla war and perhaps continue on his conquest of the Globe. All seems to be going well, until Rhys was at his side, giving him the latest report. "Sir, we have received news that the Grand Wizard has dispatched the Royal Alchemist Guard. I suggest a full retreat if we are to have any hopes of fighting on in the near future."

Neal was not happy about retreating, and his facial expression showed it. No one dared go near him when he was in this state of rage, for fear of getting decimated with a swift sword strike. The only person who he wouldn't raise his weapon to was Erika, the one who had always been a friend to him. As she began to tell him that retreat was the smart move here, he shook his head in disagreement. "If we retreat every time the Guard is sent after us, we'll never gain any ground. It would be best to crush them now and have a clear road to the Capital." But even he knew that to take on the Guard, he would need the wisdom of his tactician and possibly his only other friend on this godforsaken hunk of rock, Zigrun. The march towards their hideout in the Ulreich Mountains would fill him with dread for what lay ahead.

[Eiliosdraye]

Here is my entry:

With a well placed barrage of arrow, the front lines of the Wizard army collapse, and chaos runs through their ranks. They quickly break file and begin running around, aiming at targets that are not there, and slowly getting picked off in remorseless fashion. Watching the horrors being unleashed on his enemy, Neal breaks off into a long and thunderous laugh that can be heard even though all the horrific screams of the maimed soldiers of the Wizard army. Although outnumbered 12 to 1, the Knights of Less have rained hell on the Wizards of Lazhi, completely overwhelming their inferior defenses and all but annihilating them from their homeland in Northern Begnion.

The land being fought for seems worthless to most, but Neal knows that if he can take it, he will have a open route to the Caltraps, where he can begin a guerrilla war and perhaps continue on his conquest of the Globe. All seems to be going well, until Rhys was at his side, giving him the latest report. "Sir, we have received news that the Grand Wizard has dispatched the Royal Alchemist Guard. I suggest a full retreat if we are to have any hopes of fighting on in the near future."

Neal was not happy about retreating, and his facial expression showed it. No one dared go near him when he was in this state of rage, for fear of getting decimated with a swift sword strike. The only person who he wouldn't raise his weapon to was Erika, the one who had always been a friend to him. As she began to tell him that retreat was the smart move here, he shook his head in disagreement. "If we retreat every time the Guard is sent after us, we'll never gain any ground. It would be best to crush them now and have a clear road to the Capital." But even he knew that to take on the Guard, he would need the wisdom of his tactician and possibly his only other friend on this godforsaken hunk of rock, Zigrun. The march towards their hideout in the Ulreich Mountains would fill him with dread for what lay ahead.
I liked this. 87%. The only problem is that the Wizards are in the east, but how could you possibly know it? There was very little conflict in this, which is why it got such a low rating, but fresh blood is at the very least what you deserve, it gives you an instant insight on the layout of the land, the knights, and the way Neal operates, plus giving some back story.


I fumbled around me 5x9 cell, sparsely furnished with the gnawed bones of those who didn't survive, trying to find my one true possession of worth. The very item that had truly gotten me imprisoned in this death box, a diamond. But this is no ordinary diamond, it's the only diamond.

Many years ago the Caltraps discovered that using diamonds as a source of energy could bring them to power, and they were certainly correct. Every year for hundreds of years a diamond ring was placed in the central power cell, that gave power to all of their weapons, and machinery. And after so many years of this behavior, diamonds became rare and even more valuable.

My brethren have been forced for centuries to work as slaves searching for diamonds to power our own oppressors, and I did not need to think when I saw that glimmering speck of hope juxtaposed greatly with the blackness of the mine, I just acted. I quickly checked around for Caltraps, then took my pickax and cleared away the debris surrounding it as fast as I could. I swallowed the diamond and stole a piece of gold from another slave, just then, the lunch bell rang and the new shift shuffled in. I quickly made my way towards the exit and walked through the mineral detector, which rewarded me with a loud beeping noise. I was swiftly knocked over the head with an electric mace.

When I woke up, I found myself sitting in this little box, with the piece of gold confiscated from my left cargo pocket, but my organs and digestive tract safely intact.. this is Dimension XI14.

Pretty good, but the Caltraps are too stupid to use electricity, and the Dimension XI14 part was pointless, none of them know it, it's just the name of the universe. 80% because it's kind of boring, and inaccurate. Try reading over the source guide, if it's universe based(there's genre based and universe based always), you should read the universe backstory. Universe based always gets you a healthy 5% bonus.

[Quantooce]

Bump for great justice.

[KiteRider]

What is your username?:

KiteRider


What experience do you have?:

Usually, out of boredom, I write for the fun of it. In less than an hour, I can usually make up a decent story.


Why do you want to join the Writer's Guild?

I was one of the members before, writing out a story that I simply lost interest in.
Plus,
We will chat in there, discuss writing, and discuss guides that need to be written, be it a PG guide, a PT guide, a tech guide, or simply a thread you want stickied.

I intend to take advantage of this in writing the new map making guide.



Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can result in being barred for the group completely?:

Aware, I am.


What is the most important rule?:

Rule # 4
-Do not diss Twilight.


...
Fack, rule 7 >.<

[Eiliosdraye]

What is your username?:

KiteRider


What experience do you have?:

Usually, out of boredom, I write for the fun of it. In less than an hour, I can usually make up a decent story.


Why do you want to join the Writer's Guild?

I was one of the members before, writing out a story that I simply lost interest in.
Plus,

I intend to take advantage of this in writing the new map making guide.



Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can result in being barred for the group completely?:

Aware, I am.


What is the most important rule?:

Rule # 4
-Do not diss Twilight.

Denied, did not read the rules.

[Killah]

Here's a story I just feel like writing.

Bullets whizzing like rockets by my ears, the deafening screams of dying soldiers in pain and agony. The gunners in the stone towers scale us away as my Captain commands orders

"Everyone!, keeps your damn heads down!, and don't fire one damn bullet!"
Just as he says this, the crisp air gets pierced, a metal bullet, passes right by my ear, tearing off strands of hair.

Reinforcements pile the cluttered beach head as dead bodies cover the ground. A dying soldier crawls his way over to me, screaming. I ask, "What do you need!" Just as I say that, he gets ripped apart by bullets passing through his insides and killing dozens behind.

I dive into a trench with my BAR strapped around my back. Four more troops pile behind me, screaming for mercy. Two get shot, one being my Captain, Captain Smith.

I call for a medic, nothing. I hear my voice getting droned from the sounds of battle; Gunshots, dying soldiers, bombings, grenades, everything you could image, happening around me.

I take cover behind a stone barricade and wait for what seemed like a lifetime.
Then, it's silent. The warm ocean mist, washing over soldiers, drenched in sweat. All I could hear his Germans, calling out orders from right above me.
I look up, I'm in a German trench, with a Nazi uniform.

I'm on a cliff, with a radio on my back, what is going on?
I turn my head, to see American soldiers, tortured, belongings being snatched away and thrown at the ground.
I can't bear it. I go up to the German, grab his pistol, and pierce his gut, with a bullet.
I suddenly go back to the stone barricade, but, I'm looking down at my body from 100's of feet in the air, and rising.

[KiteRider]

http://img194.imageshack.us/img194/277/facepalmx.jpg

That was cruel, eilios.
How dare you prove my iliteracy

[Quantooce]

Would you like to apply to be a critic then Kite? We always need more of those.

[Eiliosdraye]

Here's a story I just feel like writing.

Bullets whizzing like rockets by my ears, the deafening screams of dying soldiers in pain and agony. The gunners in the stone towers scale us away as my Captain commands orders

"Everyone!, keeps your damn heads down!, and don't fire one damn bullet!"
Just as he says this, the crisp air gets pierced, a metal bullet, passes right by my ear, tearing off strands of hair.

Reinforcements pile the cluttered beach head as dead bodies cover the ground. A dying soldier crawls his way over to me, screaming. I ask, "What do you need!" Just as I say that, he gets ripped apart by bullets passing through his insides and killing dozens behind.

I dive into a trench with my BAR strapped around my back. Four more troops pile behind me, screaming for mercy. Two get shot, one being my Captain, Captain Smith.

I call for a medic, nothing. I hear my voice getting droned from the sounds of battle; Gunshots, dying soldiers, bombings, grenades, everything you could image, happening around me.

I take cover behind a stone barricade and wait for what seemed like a lifetime.
Then, it's silent. The warm ocean mist, washing over soldiers, drenched in sweat. All I could hear his Germans, calling out orders from right above me.
I look up, I'm in a German trench, with a Nazi uniform.

I'm on a cliff, with a radio on my back, what is going on?
I turn my head, to see American soldiers, tortured, belongings being snatched away and thrown at the ground.
I can't bear it. I go up to the German, grab his pistol, and pierce his gut, with a bullet.
I suddenly go back to the stone barricade, but, I'm looking down at my body from 100's of feet in the air, and rising.

I'm dead, rising to heaven, my life passing me by, my wife, getting the folded flag, my children crying in their rooms. I can't believe it.
Really good until the end. Take out the last paragraph for a really subtle ending.

[Killah]

Really good until the end. Take out the last paragraph for a really subtle ending.

Done. That pretty good for a 12 year old?

[Eiliosdraye]

Done. That pretty good for a 12 year old?
It is good, the ending with the person being a nazi gave it a shock ending, and seeing himself raise higher and higher gives an eco-twist on the whole thing and makes it godlike.

[Killah]

It is good, the ending with the person being a nazi gave it a shock ending, and seeing himself raise higher and higher gives an eco-twist on the whole thing and makes it godlike.

FREE ENTRY PL0X?

Lolwut.

[Eiliosdraye]

FREE ENTRY PL0X?

Lolwut.
Nah, you need to apply as well as follow the rules, so does everything else.

[Killah]

What is your username(newline): Killah



What experience do you have?: A+ in all 4 quarters in ELA and 95 avg + on all essays.



Why do you want to join the Writer's Guild? I like writing if it's a good topic.



Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can result in being barred for the group completely?: Yep, I don't want that to happen though.



What is the most important rule?: Rule 7.

[Eiliosdraye]

What is your username(newline): Killah



What experience do you have?: A+ in all 4 quarters in ELA and 95 avg + on all essays.



Why do you want to join the Writer's Guild? I like writing if it's a good topic.



Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can result in being barred for the group completely?: Yep, I don't want that to happen though.



What is the most important rule?: Rule 7.
Accepted, make a story using the topic(Romance or XI14 universe, the latter is more fun)

[Killah]

Accepted, make a story using the topic(Romance or XI14 universe, the latter is more fun)

So make a story about love? Like that Romance? Mmk.




Mark and Julie, once lovers, now just friends, have been having conversations on every chat possible over the internet.

They tell eachother they still have feelings for one another but can't get back together for one reason. Their parents. Five years ago, Mark's father was caught in Julie's house sexually assaulting her little sister. This outraged Julie's parents.

One time while Mark and Julie were on a chat, Julie decided to take a shower. She left the chat open with all her messeges and door open. Julie's parent's decided to see what she and Mark were talking about. They scroll up in the chat a bit and are starstruck at what they see.

They turn of the monitor and walk out of the room. Julie comes out a couple minutes later and finds the computer off. She asks her mother, "Why did you turn the computer off?"
Her mother says, "I know what you've been talking about, and I don't like it, who is this boy anyway?"
Julie hesitates, and blurts out a random name. She says Joseph. Not realizing that was Mark's dads name, she runs. Her mother screaming at her, stomps her way over to Mark's house and confronts his parents. They have no clue what Julie's mother is talking about. Mark's mother is now thinking she is making all of this up to get Mark's father in more trouble.

An hour later, Julie goes back up to her room and turns on the computer, opens up the chat, and finds Mark offline. She tries to call him, nothing. She walks over to his house, rings the doorbell, nothing. A ladder is rested on the side of Mark's room window and she takes advantage of that.

She climbs into his room, looking around. His computer his off aswell. She is still looking, until she smells a fowl smell. She peers under the bed with a flashlight, slowly, as she shines the flashlight, a pale face comes into view.
Mark.

She tugs him out from under the bed and tries CPR. Nothing.
She tries for a pulse. Nothing.

She hears someone coming up the stairs and a dripping sound. She turns Mark over to see a huge gash into his back.

The door opens, a blade in hand, blood dripping, Julie's mother.
A blood curdling scream takes over the room. Julie jumps out the window, lands in a pile of rocks, and dies immediately. Her mother dumbfounded, just stands there, realizing she has murdered a teenager and has made her daughter commit suicide.

[Snoopy]

What is your username(newline):

feat

What experience do you have?:

I write a lot, mostly war story's or prison gang stuff.

Why do you want to join the Writer's Guild?

I want to write for a cause, gunna be fun too.

Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can result in being barred for the group completely?:

Yes.

What is the most important rule?:

Number 4.

[Quantooce]

Write a short story based on the theme Eilios has given.

gogogogogo

[Snoopy]

Write a short story based on the theme Eilios has given.

gogogogogo
Do i send it to him?

[Quantooce]

Just post it in the thread, he'll eventually look at it.

[Eiliosdraye]

What is your username(newline):

feat

What experience do you have?:

I write a lot, mostly war story's or prison gang stuff.

Why do you want to join the Writer's Guild?

I want to write for a cause, gunna be fun too.

Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can result in being barred for the group completely?:

Yes.

What is the most important rule?:

Number 4.

Didn't read the rules. Denied.

[ArmyDude]

I don't feel like joining, but I might as well post my previous stories anyways. I write what I want to write. I write when I feel like it. I feel writing stories is a hobby for me, and not some kind of job. :/

*NOTICE: THESE STORIES WERE MADE OVER A YEAR AGO FOR FUN. DO NOT EXPECT THEM TO BE COLLEGE WORK OR HAVE THE LANGUAGE OF WILLIAM SHAKESPEARE. I ALREADY KNOW THERE IS NUMEROUS GRAMMER ERRORS, SO DON'T COMPLAIN AND WHINE ABOUT EVERY WORD I MISSPELL.*

Previous Stories

The Nazi Invaders (series)
The Nazi Invaders - Stalingrad (http://www.pawngame.com/forum/showthread.php?t=68401)
The Nazi Invaders - The Aftermath (http://www.pawngame.com/forum/showthread.php?t=68642)
The Nazi Invaders - The Sniper (http://www.pawngame.com/forum/showthread.php?t=73903)

A Slice of Hell (series)
A Slice of Hell - The Scouting Party (http://www.pawngame.com/forum/showthread.php?t=81994)
A Slice of Hell - The Mistake (http://www.pawngame.com/forum/showthread.php?t=82807)

Other stories
A Normal Sunday Morning? (http://www.pawngame.com/forum/showthread.php?t=64031)

War Ain't Pretty (short story) (http://www.pawngame.com/forum/showthread.php?t=107399)

Coming into France - Beyond the Beaches of Normandy (only surviving story of series) (http://www.pawngame.com/forum/showthread.php?t=74179)

9/11 Tribute (http://www.pawngame.com/forum/showthread.php?t=80413)

*There was two more stories for the "Coming into France" series, but apparently they dosen't exist anymore.*

[maggerz]

What is your username(newline):
Maggerz - Magnester - Magz0rz



What experience do you have?:
Somewhat above average experience for someone my age.


Why do you want to join the Writer's Guild?
Well, Pawn needs more intelligent threads and discussions.

Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can result in being barred for the group completely?:
Yes.


What is the most important rule?:
Rule 1.

[Eiliosdraye]

What is your username(newline):
Maggerz - Magnester - Magz0rz



What experience do you have?:
Somewhat above average experience for someone my age.


Why do you want to join the Writer's Guild?
Well, Pawn needs more intelligent threads and discussions.

Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can result in being barred for the group completely?:
Yes.


What is the most important rule?:
Rule 1.
Dee ee en eye ee dee

[imnotanoob]

Lul, you lyek mah gides?
I just remember they're saved on my grandparent's computer because you put them together and made them html. Here they are:

Hello, this is eilios. Because everybody LOVES ImNotANoob's guide, and it is so informative and helpful I have decided to convert his entire collection of guides into HTML so it may be displayed when it is accepted. And believe me, it will be accepted. So, on with the guides! Read and ENJOY!



introdukion

Ar u tired of sukin so bad? do yoo wana lern how to bee teh best? den reed this gide! Ok first thingz first how gewd do yoo think u ar frum a scale of 1-10? what wuz dat? if you pickd 0 then u wer rite! how can u get beter u ask? reed this gide!

indecs

1. how 2 own

2. deelin with hax0rz

3. deelin with n00bs

4. smart wepon chocis

5 how 2 own evn mor


How 2 own

as it iz now its hard 2 own in pawn becuz the game is filed with hax0rz, an itz hard 2 own hax0rz. but lukily 4 u teh game is also filed with n00bs, but unlukily for u, n00bs ar inoying. so if da n00bz ar inoying u just insult dem reely harshfuly and deyl probly stop. ok 2 own itz best to hav all da gides open in all difrent windowz 4 refrence ESPESHILLY DIS 1, don forget dis 1. ill tell u how 2 own evn mor in da how 2 own evn mor secton.

Deelin with hax0rs

ok lyek i sed be4 dis game is filed with hax0rs. how 2 no if sum1 is haxin:
if dey keep shotin u in teh hed dey prolly a hax0r
if dey sumhow shot throo a wall wit a bloo bullit, they a hax0r
if dey kill yoo reel fast dey prolly a haxor
if dey sumhow get der helth back dey prolly a hoxor
teh best ting 2 do wen u encountr a hax0r is 2 acuse dem of it until dey admit it, den tak a screenshot of it an send it 2 a mod EXCEPT 4 BEENY beeny isnt a smart mod.

deelin wit n00bs

lyek i sed b4! just tel dem that der stoopid an dey wil prolly go away! but if dey don, then report dem 4 harasmint

smart wepon chocis

itz best u alweys use startn pistol becuz if u get reely good wit it u own

how 2 own evn mor
reed dis gide and ull be ownin in no tiym!

-ImNotANoob

alrite!!! becuz sum pepl dint lik my firs 1. coff coff n000000000000bz coff coff i desided to mak a noo wun wit mor stuf an stuf

indecs

how 2 hitz pepl

how 2 pwn noobyz

how 2 pwn 1337 pepl

how 2 mak good mapz

how 2 deel wit haxors

how 2 deel wit n00bz!

how 2 maze

how 2 not get band

credits



how 2 hitz pepl

ok so in teh gam win u get clos 2 sum1 tri 2 hit dem wit ur gun bi moovin it up an down reely fast. if dey don get hit den dey haxin. il tel u how 2 deel wit haxors l8r in teh gide.

how 2 pwn noobyz

ok so if teh n00byz ar pwnin u yoo need 2 star pwnin dem "but how shood i go abowt ownin da noobehz oh grate smexy 1?" Bi kilin dem uv corse! tak owt ur ownige pistil an hit dem wit it!

how 2 pwn 1337 pepl

ok so dis is a lil bit hardir, wat u hav to do is get dem 2 star tipeing den hit dem wit ur ownige pistil!!!

how 2 mak good mapz

ok so u wana lern how 2 mak good maps???? don folo n00by lives gide folo dis on. ok so evry1 nos dat wen it coms to mapz bigir is betir and teh mor da mariyr. mak a 3 bi 3 map an put a tun ov laderz, respans, an refils. make sur to put alot uv baxis 2. boxis ae gewd!

how 2 deel wit haxorz

ok so if sum1 is haxin dis is wat u shood doo. complane abowt dem haxin untill dey admitt it, even if dis meens u hav 2 folo dem from gam to gam, and wen dey do admit it send it in ey pm to al ov teh modz, jus in cas. "oh but how doo yoo no sum1 is haxin mi sexi manli man?" Wel heers how u no:

1. if dey sumhow kil u in 1 shot, dey a haxor
2. if dey sumhow tern invisable, dey a haxor
3. if dey sumhow shot throo walz, dey a haxor
4. if dey sumhow lyek half invisable and not hertable den dey a haxor
5. if u see dem kil me, dey a haxor

how 2 deel wit n00bz!!!

tel dem dey ar stoopid an dey wil prolly go awey, but if dey don, report dem

how 2 maze

mazin is 4 n00bz don do it

how not to get band

don do bad tings an u usully won get band, but sumtimz n00by modz wil ban u becuz dey n00by an stoopid!

controlz: yoos da moov buttins 2 moov an da shot butins to shot

dats mi gide! im so sori it wil replase al uv urs!

creditz: me- fer beein supir awsim

awsim pepl hoo donaytd to meh:

eiliosdraye (238)
Chickletman (95)
kj446 (80)
firstmate (25)
Shooter65 (5)
owkey becuz uv populir deemand i am mayd a therd gide hers da indecs

indecs

how to us a wepinz

how to rayip a n00bz

how to pley lyek a 1337 ppl

how to pley lyek a 1337 persin

how to mayk gewd mapz

how to mayz

how to deel wit hax0rz!!!1!

how to deel wit n00bz!!

how not 2 get band!

how to get creedotz!

creedotz!



how to us a wepinz

okey so aperintly i hav recintly fownd owt dat hitin pepl es nowt da owli wey to hert dem. i wuz towild dat yoo can shewt bi clikin BUT da bulits don alweys het da persun yoo wana kel so da safist wey to kell sum1 es to jus het dem wit ur owneg pisil bi heten den bi moovin et up an dowin reely fass. wen dey fawl dowin remebir to jump on der bodee to mayik shoor dey ar ded.

how to rayip a n00bz

wen dey ar ded (see howe ubuv stoopid!) crowch on der bodee an put ur gun en ay posetion wer winevr u croch it gois up der BUTT HOWL! rememer to doo et reeli fass or it don lewk as gewd.

how to rayip a 1337 ppl

ok wit da 1337 ppl ets a lil hardir, yoo hav to doo et reely fas becuz dey ar nown to reswawin reeli fas, i meen lik supir fass like yoo don eben see dem respawin an yoo al lik "wowe dat wuz fas" so wut joo hav to doo es rayip dem eben fasser lyek loodicris speed lyek yoo don eben no!

how to pley lyek 1337 persin

sum uv joo hav seen da scrin showt of meh ownin cheklitman ef nowt yoo kan fin et her: http://pawngame.com/forum/showthread.php?t=94177 nao ef yoo wan to bee ownig lyek dis folo dees simpil rools.

1. joyin dis klan an yoo alredy on yer wey to beein awsim!http://pawngame.com/forum/showthread.php?t=77618
2. rememer to hit dem wit ur ownig pistil
3. don evr maz mazn es fer nubies
4. folo mi gide
5. bee a gewd boy
der ar sum udder rools but eym afrade dat dey ar 2 complix fer ur litl mind

how to mayik gewd mapz

wana mayk gewd mapz lyek dis wun?!
koolist map EVAR!!!
den jus folo dees rools
1. da mor da merier!
2. put lowtz uv respans
3. put lowtz uv boxis

how to mayze

don mayz stoopid i alredy tol yoo nowt 2

how to deel wit hax0rs!!!1!

okey ef sum1 es haxin jus keep acyoosin dem uv haxin untel de admet too et (eben ef des meenz yoo hav to folo dem from gaim to gaim) an den wen dey doo screeni et fas an send et to awl da modz as fass as yoo kan! (jus to bee sayf) "but howe do i no wen sum1 es haxin my sexi man beest?" wel dis is howe yoo no:

1. if dey sumhow kil u in 1 shot, dey a haxor
2. if dey sumhow tern invisable, dey a haxor
3. if dey sumhow shot throo walz, dey a haxor
4. if dey sumhow lyek half invisable and not hertable den dey a haxor
5. if u see dem kil me, dey a haxor
6. if aftir yoo kil dem dey *** bak to lyef den dey a haxor
7. if dey hav mor kilz den meh dey a haxor

how to deel wit n00bz!!

mayk fun ov dem an tel dem dey ar stoopid an dey suk! if dey stil don go awey report dem fer beein n00by! if dey stil don go ewey den HIT DEM WIT UR OWNIG PISIL

how not 2 get band

don doo bad stof an yoo prolly not get band, but sumtymes n00by mods lyek beeni (nvm abowt dat beeni reeli awsim he giv meh awl his creedotz) wil ban joo for no raisin!!!

howe to get creedots

post lotz uv thredz dat wil get vyood alowt an den giv al dem to meh! if yoo dont giv me al ur creedotz den ur stopid an n00by an don deserv a compyootir.

creedots!

Meh 4 beein supr awsim

[IrishDragon1234]

The Writer's Guild of Pawngame
Founded 2009, by Eiliosdraye

http://icanhascheezburger.files.wordpress.com/2007/01/its-beautiful.jpg

[Eiliosdraye]

http://icanhascheezburger.files.wordpress.com/2007/01/its-beautiful.jpg
???


Also, still lolling at INAN's guide. It's been 3 days, all of you denied guys can reapply.

[wut]

I'm gonna make Neal the protagonist....

-------------------------------------------------------------------------------

"Ready!"
"Aim!"
"FIRE!", I screamed as loud as my lungs would allow. At that very instance the Lesser Knights let their arrows fly. Watching the arrows rain down on the wizards reminded me of the vigorous training I was put through. Those damn wizards are getting what they deserve. As I came back to reality I soon noticed that the knights were starting to fall. Oblivious to them, the wizards had set a magnetism spell on the ground near their feet.
"Is that all you've got you god forsaken magic users?!", I shouted to the wizards as I lifted the magnetism spell. Soon, they would be the ones falling the ground after I've ripped each and everyone of their puny little heads off.
"Get ready to charge! Draw your swords!", I demanded of the knights. "On the count of 3. 1! 2! 3! CHARGE!" As soon as the word 'charge' exited my lips the Lesser Knights all moved in unison. When they reached the wizards I couldn't help but laugh. The almighty wizards being defeated by a bunch of peasants. Oh the irony of it all.
As the last wizard was struck down I looked around, soon realizing where we were, the king's courtyard.
I looked up into the castle and shouted 3 words, "Its your turn!" I looked around, saw nothing in sight, and walked inside with the knights. They king is going to pay.

---------------------------------------------------------------------------

To tired to write more at the moment. If you want me to write something else, I'll do it later.

[Eiliosdraye]

I'm gonna make Neal the protagonist....

-------------------------------------------------------------------------------

"Ready!"
"Aim!"
"FIRE!", I screamed as loud as my lungs would allow. At that very instance the Lesser Knights let their arrows fly. Watching the arrows rain down on the wizards reminded me of the vigorous training I was put through. Those damn wizards are getting what they deserve. As I came back to reality I soon noticed that the knights were starting to fall. Oblivious to them, the wizards had set a magnetism spell on the ground near their feet.
"Is that all you've got you god forsaken magic users?!", I shouted to the wizards as I lifted the magnetism spell. Soon, they would be the ones falling the ground after I've ripped each and everyone of their puny little heads off.
"Get ready to charge! Draw your swords!", I demanded of the knights. "On the count of 3. 1! 2! 3! CHARGE!" As soon as the word 'charge' exited my lips the Lesser Knights all moved in unison. When they reached the wizards I couldn't help but laugh. The almighty wizards being defeated by a bunch of peasants. Oh the irony of it all.
As the last wizard was struck down I looked around, soon realizing where we were, the king's courtyard.
I looked up into the castle and shouted 3 words, "Its your turn!" I looked around, saw nothing in sight, and walked inside with the knights. They king is going to pay.

---------------------------------------------------------------------------

To tired to write more at the moment. If you want me to write something else, I'll do it later.

You got Neal's mindset done really well. Neal is actually one of the antagonists in Havock(which means you get to fight him! YAY!), since it uses the same story, and the idea was he was kicked out of the Wizard's guild because he was too cocky, which caused him to get uber pissed and train a couple of peasants in using basic magic, trained them to fight well, and called them the Knights of Less, and since he has more magical power then all of the wizards combined, he thought he was a god, and is trying to take over the world.

[wut]

You got Neal's mindset done really well. Neal is actually one of the antagonists in Havock(which means you get to fight him! YAY!), since it uses the same story, and the idea was he was kicked out of the Wizard's guild because he was too cocky, which caused him to get uber pissed and train a couple of peasants in using basic magic, trained them to fight well, and called them the Knights of Less, and since he has more magical power then all of the wizards combined, he thought he was a god, and is trying to take over the world.

Sooooooooooo......

I'm in?

[Eiliosdraye]

Sooooooooooo......

I'm in?
Make it longer.

[wut]

Make it longer.

Alright.

I will later when I'm actually awake.

[imnotanoob]

What is your username(newline):

ImNotANoob

What experience do you have?:

I've written short stories and a little bit on poetry.

Why do you want to join the Writer's Guild?

So I can share my writing.

Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can result in being barred for the group completely?:

Yes.

What is the most important rule?:

Rule 3.

[SneaK]

What is your username(newline):
My username is currently Sneak; soon to be Chet1337.



What experience do you have?:
In 4th grade on up (Currently freshmen) I have been writing stories in school for my English teacher for extra credit. (Passed that class with a 97%)



Why do you want to join the Writer's Guild?
To be known for writing my stories. To write stories for the famous Eilios.



Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can result in being barred for the group completely?:
Yes, sir.



What is the most important rule?:
Rule #4, yes I actually read the rules, you will see NO edit. :)



~Consider me, yes that was my brother on the IRC yesterday annoying you guys, I am sorry for that mishap.

[Eiliosdraye]

what is your username(newline):
my username is currently sneak; soon to be chet1337.



what experience do you have?:
in 4th grade on up (currently freshmen) i have been writing stories in school for my english teacher for extra credit. (passed that class with a 97%)



why do you want to join the writer's guild?
to be known for writing my stories. To write stories for the famous eilios.



are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can result in being barred for the group completely?:
yes, sir.



what is the most important rule?:
rule #4, yes i actually read the rules, you will see no edit. :)



~consider me, yes that was my brother on the irc yesterday annoying you guys, i am sorry for that mishap.



d-d-d-d-denied.

[SneaK]

d-d-d-d-denied.

For.........?

[Eiliosdraye]

for.........?
n-n-n-n-not r-r-r-r-r-reading the r-r-r-rules

[SneaK]

n-n-n-n-not r-r-r-r-r-reading the r-r-r-rules

But I did. o.O

[Soul]

What is your Username?: If your reading the post you should see it. It's soul if you're to lazy.

Age?: 20

What experience do you have as a critic?: I like to be a **** and I've helped edit my friend's novels.

Why do you want to join the writers guild as a critic?: I don't have enough imagination to be a writer.

Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can result in being barred for the group completely?: Yes

Do you think you can help authors in the guild improve their work?: yes

Rules for being a critic

1. No immature comments. Post constructive responses that can help the author improve upon their work.

2. No flaming over a persons short story, poem, etc.

3. Don't post ridiculous critiuqe such as "TL;DR" or "this story sucks". Actually post what is wrong with their story/poem etc.

Yeah, yeah, make with the accepting.

[Eiliosdraye]

What is your Username?: If your reading the post you should see it. It's soul if you're to lazy.

Age?: 20

What experience do you have as a critic?: I like to be a **** and I've helped edit my friend's novels.

Why do you want to join the writers guild as a critic?: I don't have enough imagination to be a writer.

Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can result in being barred for the group completely?: Yes

Do you think you can help authors in the guild improve their work?: yes

Rules for being a critic

1. No immature comments. Post constructive responses that can help the author improve upon their work.

2. No flaming over a persons short story, poem, etc.

3. Don't post ridiculous critiuqe such as "TL;DR" or "this story sucks". Actually post what is wrong with their story/poem etc.

Yeah, yeah, make with the accepting.
Mmk, accepted, stay active.

[imnotanoob]

Answer my second app dammit.

[KiteRider]

What is your username?:

KiteRider


What experience do you have?:

Usually, out of boredom, I write for the fun of it. In less than an hour, I can usually make up a decent story.


Why do you want to join the Writer's Guild?

I was one of the members before, writing out a story that I simply lost interest in.
Plus,
We will chat in there, discuss writing, and discuss guides that need to be written, be it a PG guide, a PT guide, a tech guide, or simply a thread you want stickied.

I intend to take advantage of this in writing the new map making guide.



Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can result in being barred for the group completely?:

Aware, I am.


What is the most important rule?:

Rule # 7

Ignore the fact that I was too lazy to re-write my application
Writing'll be up soon >.>

[Bonk]

What is your username(newline):
Bonk (Yuh.)
What experience do you have?:
I haven't failed English ever. I write letters and journalize every day.
Why do you want to join the Writer's Guild?
I need something to write through, I have to be able to

Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions (very hard to do) can result in being barred from the group completely?:
Yes.

What is the most important rule?:
Rule 3

[Timeline]

Attention guildmates one and all! Fasten your seatbelts and start up your engines because something BIG is coming, and oh, it's big.

[Eiliosdraye]

Attention guildmates: Now accepting applications for Havock's Writers.


Similiar to DimensionXI14(using the same universe), I want you to make a hilarious script, using the character (Player). Here's an example.


Player: Hello! Nice house you have here!
Bandit: Get lost, kid.
Player: That's not very nice at all!
Bandit: I told you, GET LOST.
Player: Why so serious?
Bandit: What the hell?
Player: Sorry, I just had an urge to say that.
Bandit: Are you possessed?
Player: You know, I think I may be.
The obvious joke here is that the player is being played by somebody else, and the "are you possessed" line breaks the fourth wall in a humorous way.

If you don't like writing dialogue, you can write stories, too. Keep in mind ,you cannot write ANY of the dialogue for your characters, so it would be like


You are in a fortress, and see a hydra running up to you. Boss fight ensues. After this, a crazy woman runs up to you, and says something along the lines of "Why did you kill my hydra?" Dialogue ensues, and you are taken to part of the sewers. From here, blablabla

You can only suggest dialogue, because the dialogue writers have to be hilarious, you have to make the actual plot.

[imnotanoob]

What is your username(newline):

ImNotANoob

What experience do you have?:

I've written short stories and a little bit on poetry.

Why do you want to join the Writer's Guild?

So I can share my writing.

Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can result in being barred for the group completely?:

Yes.

What is the most important rule?:

Rule 3.

I reposted my app back there, can you answer it?
As for the the script writing, I could DEFINITELY help.

[Eiliosdraye]

What is your username(newline):

ImNotANoob

What experience do you have?:

I've written short stories and a little bit on poetry.

Why do you want to join the Writer's Guild?

So I can share my writing.

Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can result in being barred for the group completely?:

Yes.

What is the most important rule?:

Rule 3.
Accepted, but barely. Write a short story using the topic.

[imnotanoob]

Just finished my short story. Here it is:

The Littlest Caltrap
Once upon a time there was a little Caltrap named Jojo. This little baby Caltrap was not where he was supposed to be. This was because he was kidnapped by the Knights of Less at birth. This made the littlest Caltrap very sad. Jojo spent most of his young childhood in a dungeon or trying to communicate with Knights. After about 3 years the Knights were successful in teaching Jojo basic writing. Jojo wrote to them that he wasn’t happy where he was and that he wanted to be free. This made the Knights very puzzled on how to deal with this Caltrap, so they called on the assistance of Neal. Neal was the leader of the Knights and was a very scary man.
“All mighty Neal!” exclaimed the knight in blue armor, “we call upon you for assistance!”
“And what assistance may this be?” Neal asked.
“This young Caltrap is not happy here and he wants to be free.” The knight explained, “What ever shall we do with him?”
“He is no use to us, we know all that we need to know. Kill him before he becomes too powerful.”
“Kill him?!” The Knight shouted “We can’t just let him go?”
“We don’t need another one of those out in the battlefield later, dispose of him now.”
“I understand” said the Knight solemnly.
Jojo heard this but did not fully understand, but he clearly got the message when the Knight with black armor began to walk toward him with a large axe. The knight walked into the dungeon and saw Jojo in the corner. He picked little Jojo up by his left foot and chuckled sadistically. He dropped him and raised his axe high, then struck down in a chopping motion, Jojo jumped out of the way and the axe bounced off the hard floor and the other end stabbed the knight right through the eye hole in his helmet. Jojo fled the dungeon as fast as he could. He ran up the stairs to the ground floor of the castle. There were several knights conversing by the front door, Jojo had to think of a way to get passed them. Jojo noticed that on the wall across from him there were several sets of weapons hung up. He walked quietly over to the wall and pulled down a bow and plenty of arrows. The first shot was going to have to be a distraction because none of the knights were facing him and the only place he could kill them is by shooting directly through one of the eye holes. So with amazing accuracy he shot the chain holding the chandelier above them causing it to crash down right in between them. The knights were shocked; the first one to turn towards Jojo was shot in the eye immediately. One by one the little Caltrap killed with ease until the door was clear. He made his way out the castle and lowered the bridge to cross the moat. When Neal looked out the window to see this, he was not pleased. Neal called all of the archers to eliminate Jojo. Just as Jojo had just made it across the bridge he turned around to see hundreds of archers aiming at him. The first archer fired an arrow directly at Jojo, Jojo caught it and threw it back and pierced the archer’s throat. The archer spewed blood out of his mouth and fell to the ground twitching. The rest of the archers fired at him, Jojo seeing a wall of arrows flying at him jumped behind a tree. He came out from behind the tree and the archers began reloading. Taking advantage of this time Jojo took out as many as he could with his bow and arrow, but he barely made a dent in the hundreds of archers standing before him. He had to come up with an idea and had to do it fast. Could he run away quickly enough? No, if he tried he would be shot in the back. There was only one tree in sight and it was the one he was hiding behind. So he did the most logical thing, climb it from the back. He stayed up there until they sent out a soldier in armor to go behind the tree and kill him. The soldier looked behind the tree and Jojo jumped onto his shoulders and drove an arrow through his skull through his eye hole. Jojo covered himself with pieces of the soldier’s armor and ran off. He ran until he got to a village. Now that he was able to write he was able to ask about the whereabouts of the Caltraps. Once he got the information he needed he ran to them as fast as he could. Once he got there he told them the location of the Knights of Less and they were eliminated.
The End

Edit: lol, it looked a lot longer on MS Word.

[Eiliosdraye]

Just finished my short story. Here it is:

The Littlest Caltrap
Once upon a time there was a little Caltrap named Jojo. This little baby Caltrap was not where he was supposed to be. This was because he was kidnapped by the Knights of Less at birth. This made the littlest Caltrap very sad. Jojo spent most of his young childhood in a dungeon or trying to communicate with Knights. After about 3 years the Knights were successful in teaching Jojo basic writing. Jojo wrote to them that he wasn’t happy where he was and that he wanted to be free. This made the Knights very puzzled on how to deal with this Caltrap, so they called on the assistance of Neal. Neal was the leader of the Knights and was a very scary man.
“All mighty Neal!” exclaimed the knight in blue armor, “we call upon you for assistance!”
“And what assistance may this be?” Neal asked.
“This young Caltrap is not happy here and he wants to be free.” The knight explained, “What ever shall we do with him?”
“He is no use to us, we know all that we need to know. Kill him before he becomes too powerful.”
“Kill him?!” The Knight shouted “We can’t just let him go?”
“We don’t need another one of those out in the battlefield later, dispose of him now.”
“I understand” said the Knight solemnly.
Jojo heard this but did not fully understand, but he clearly got the message when the Knight with black armor began to walk toward him with a large axe. The knight walked into the dungeon and saw Jojo in the corner. He picked little Jojo up by his left foot and chuckled sadistically. He dropped him and raised his axe high, then struck down in a chopping motion, Jojo jumped out of the way and the axe bounced off the hard floor and the other end stabbed the knight right through the eye hole in his helmet. Jojo fled the dungeon as fast as he could. He ran up the stairs to the ground floor of the castle. There were several knights conversing by the front door, Jojo had to think of a way to get passed them. Jojo noticed that on the wall across from him there were several sets of weapons hung up. He walked quietly over to the wall and pulled down a bow and plenty of arrows. The first shot was going to have to be a distraction because none of the knights were facing him and the only place he could kill them is by shooting directly through one of the eye holes. So with amazing accuracy he shot the chain holding the chandelier above them causing it to crash down right in between them. The knights were shocked; the first one to turn towards Jojo was shot in the eye immediately. One by one the little Caltrap killed with ease until the door was clear. He made his way out the castle and lowered the bridge to cross the moat. When Neal looked out the window to see this, he was not pleased. Neal called all of the archers to eliminate Jojo. Just as Jojo had just made it across the bridge he turned around to see hundreds of archers aiming at him. The first archer fired an arrow directly at Jojo, Jojo caught it and threw it back and pierced the archer’s throat. The archer spewed blood out of his mouth and fell to the ground twitching. The rest of the archers fired at him, Jojo seeing a wall of arrows flying at him jumped behind a tree. He came out from behind the tree and the archers began reloading. Taking advantage of this time Jojo took out as many as he could with his bow and arrow, but he barely made a dent in the hundreds of archers standing before him. He had to come up with an idea and had to do it fast. Could he run away quickly enough? No, if he tried he would be shot in the back. There was only one tree in sight and it was the one he was hiding behind. So he did the most logical thing, climb it from the back. He stayed up there until they sent out a soldier in armor to go behind the tree and kill him. The soldier looked behind the tree and Jojo jumped onto his shoulders and drove an arrow through his skull through his eye hole. Jojo covered himself with pieces of the soldier’s armor and ran off. He ran until he got to a village. Now that he was able to write he was able to ask about the whereabouts of the Caltraps. Once he got the information he needed he ran to them as fast as he could. Once he got there he told them the location of the Knights of Less and they were eliminated.
The End

Edit: lol, it looked a lot longer on MS Word.
WTF? The Knights of Less aren't hard to find, they live in a enormous castle. Also, three Knights of Less can cause an earthquake, and the archers employed by them will scare the Caltraps off. I like the action in this, but you didn't really think about the fact that Neal has god-like powers.
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[blondie]

Oh, that's cool. I write stories, but I don't think anyone would really fit with my style on this forum :3

Glad people are writing, though.

[Quantooce]

What is your Username?: If your reading the post you should see it. It's soul if you're to lazy.

Age?: 20

What experience do you have as a critic?: I like to be a **** and I've helped edit my friend's novels.

Why do you want to join the writers guild as a critic?: I don't have enough imagination to be a writer.

Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can result in being barred for the group completely?: Yes

Do you think you can help authors in the guild improve their work?: yes

Rules for being a critic

1. No immature comments. Post constructive responses that can help the author improve upon their work.

2. No flaming over a persons short story, poem, etc.

3. Don't post ridiculous critiuqe such as "TL;DR" or "this story sucks". Actually post what is wrong with their story/poem etc.

Yeah, yeah, make with the accepting.

Denied from me.

[Quantooce]

Bump for the lulz.

[FlAr3]

What is your username(newline):
FlAr3



What experience do you have?:
Alot, if I must prove it, make me write you a story.



Why do you want to join the Writer's Guild?
To write stories & have them be read.



Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can result in being barred for the group completely?:
Most definantly.



What is the most important rule?:
Rule #3.


___________________________________________
EDIT: PM me if I get in or not, please.

[Villyer]

What is your Username?: Villyer

Age?: 15

What experience do you have as a critic?: None. At least, Ive never done it before. But I do know a bit about what makes a good story, so I could give pointers and do some, well, critquing.
Test me if you want too.

Why do you want to join the writers guild as a critic?: It sounds like a bit of fun. =D

Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can result in being barred for the group completely?: Yes I am.

Do you think you can help authors in the guild improve their work?: I cant hold their hand while they right a good story, but I can tell them what in their story makes it suck.

Rules for being a critic

1. No immature comments. Post constructive responses that can help the author improve upon their work.

2. No flaming over a persons short story, poem, etc.

3. Don't post ridiculous critiuqe such as "TL;DR" or "this story sucks". Actually post what is wrong with their story/poem etc.
(Uhmm, no question here, but I understand the rules)

[Quantooce]

What is your Username?: Villyer

Age?: 15

What experience do you have as a critic?: None. At least, Ive never done it before. But I do know a bit about what makes a good story, so I could give pointers and do some, well, critquing.
Test me if you want too.

Why do you want to join the writers guild as a critic?: It sounds like a bit of fun. =D

Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can result in being barred for the group completely?: Yes I am.

Do you think you can help authors in the guild improve their work?: I cant hold their hand while they right a good story, but I can tell them what in their story makes it suck.

Rules for being a critic

1. No immature comments. Post constructive responses that can help the author improve upon their work.

2. No flaming over a persons short story, poem, etc.

3. Don't post ridiculous critiuqe such as "TL;DR" or "this story sucks". Actually post what is wrong with their story/poem etc.
(Uhmm, no question here, but I understand the rules)

"Ready!" shouted the captain as I pulled back on my bow-string, ready to fire.

"Aim!" he shouted again, and I did as commanded.


"FIRE!!" He screamed now, and the damned Caltraps heard us. I laughed as our arrows pierced their ranks, watched as they screamed in misery, watched as they were punished for their crimes against nature. They would pay for taking our home from us, they would pay dearly.

This thought emboldened me, as I drew my long sword, and jumped from the tree I was hiding in. The Caltrap screamed in a subtle mix of hatred, agony, and pure stupidity, and charged me. Stupid beast. I held my sword at neck point, and charged. Little sucker thought I was challenging it, or at least until my throat pierced it's neck, and it's lifeblood splattered on the floor. I looked at it's eyes and said, simply, "You are dead,". It looked back at me, honoured to lose to a more skilled opponent, then died.

"Siris! Stop with the small fry, we have a Major coming at you! Oh, and duck!" my captain said, I did as told, and a rock missed my head by an inch. I let out an Elven war-cry, and charged the Major. It's green skin seemed to ripple with it's enraged bellow, and it charged, holding a makeshift club made out of a stump and a sharp piece of metal. It swung at me, I nimbly dodged and thrusted a knife into it's leg. It's two times my size and going down. It laughed off the pain, and swung at an odd angle, very slowly, but obviously with great force. I jumped over, and tripped it as it was stepping towards me for a headbutt. It fell on the ground where Tes jumped it, and stabbed it with knives.

"This could take awhile, cover me!" shouted Tessil, I agreed.
Soon, the Caltraps, seeing their leader down were enraged, and decided it was a good time to take me and Tes out. I pulled out my shortbow, and felt the wood. So good, I missed the forests, but a voice snapped me back to the unpleasant truth, that it was gone, and I needed to protect Tessil. More Caltraps jumped out, and then the problem escalated. They outnumbered us 4 to 1, and we were surrounded. Now it was a fair fight, and that was not in our favour.

The Caltraps threw rocks around me in a circular motion, and I screamed for Tes to duck. Several Caltraps were hit by their own teammates, causing them to charge enraged. I sighed, and laughed aloud at the stupidity of these things, pinched some Terri Powder, and threw it at the ground. Smoke filled the air immediately, our eyes were trained to deal with it, and I quickly snapped about 3 necks, left my other knife in a Caltrap's throat, and only one was there, and the smoke was clearing. It grinned in that evil grin only a demonic being can do, and swung at me.

That was no Caltrap. Suddenly, I realized why this one's stomps were too quiet, too planned. This was a goblin. I quickly adapted my tactics, planning to use it's stupidity against it was no good, I feinted with my dagger, then slapped it with my sword. Enraged, it charged at me, and made it's first mistake. Never close the distance with an elf. I threw some powder in it's face, temporarily blinding it as the smoke filled it's body, and shoved the rest in it's mouth. Goblin's skin is too tough for these wimpy swords, I thought to myself, as the Goblin's stomach acid mixed with the smoke chemically and burned a hole through it's wind pipe and head. It couldn't breathe, and eventually fell over. By then, the Caltraps were gone, scared that their leader was out. It was a minor victory, but for a new recruit it was damn impressive. If I didn't get a medal of intelligence for this, I don't know what I would get.

Critique this.

[Villyer]

"Ready!" shouted the captain as I pulled back on my bow-string, ready to fire.

The captian shouting and you drawing your string would not be happening simotanuouly. (spelled that wrong)

"Aim!" he shouted again, and I did as commanded.

The way 'again' is placed makes it sound like he shouded 'Aim!' again, instead of the again going to the 'shouted' as was intended.

"FIRE!!" He screamed now, and the damned Caltraps heard us.

I would remove the word 'now', or rearrange the sentence so that it reads more clearly.
I laughed as our arrows pierced their ranks, watched as they screamed in misery, watched as they were punished for their crimes against nature. They would pay for taking our home from us, they would pay dearly.

This would have more power if the verbs were either all the same or all different, instead of 'laughed', 'watched', and 'watched'.
This thought emboldened me, as I drew my long sword, and jumped from the tree I was hiding in.

All of those commans are useless.

The Caltrap screamed in a subtle mix of hatred, agony, and pure stupidity, and charged me.

You say 'The Caltrap'. Nowhere did you specify any Caltrap though, so you should say "A Caltrap'.

Stupid beast. I held my sword at neck point, and charged.

Useless comma.

Little sucker thought I was challenging it, or at least until my throat pierced it's neck, and it's lifeblood splattered on the floor.

The phrase in the middle sounds a little off. And the word 'throat' should be sword. 'lifeblood' is an odd choice of words, it may be slang in the story, but since it is only used once it should be removed.

I looked at it's eyes and said, simply, "You are dead,". It looked back at me, honoured to lose to a more skilled opponent, then died.

"Siris! Stop with the small fry, we have a Major coming at you! Oh, and duck!" my captain said, I did as told, and a rock missed my head by an inch.

This is insanely cheesy and un-warlike.

I let out an Elven war-cry, and charged the Major.

No comma.

It's green skin seemed to ripple with it's enraged bellow, and it charged, holding a makeshift club made out of a stump and a sharp piece of metal.

Two enemys yelling and changing each other? How cliche...

It swung at me, I nimbly dodged and thrusted a knife into it's leg.

Instead of a comma, use a semi-colon.

It's two times my size and going down.

This sentence feels out of place in this story, especially since it sisnt actually fall.

It laughed off the pain, and swung at an odd angle, very slowly, but obviously with great force.

Remove the first comma.

I jumped over, and tripped it as it was stepping towards me for a headbutt.

Jumped over... what? And tripped it? It being the sword or he brute?
You need some clairifying in this sentence.

It fell on the ground where Tes jumped it, and stabbed it with knives.

Useless comma, and who is Tes? (probably a series thing, but I didnt read anything else, and if this is a short story, you should clairify)

"This could take awhile, cover me!" shouted Tessil, I agreed.

Take awhile to stab a disabled thing to death? (more of a probably series thing)

Soon, the Caltraps, seeing their leader down were enraged, and decided it was a good time to take me and Tes out.

First comma is useless. should be a comma between 'down' and 'were'. And werent the Caltraps trying to take you guys out this entire time, or did they just decide to try and kill you?

I pulled out my shortbow, and felt the wood.

No comma.

So good, I missed the forests, but a voice snapped me back to the unpleasant truth, that it was gone, and I needed to protect Tessil.

This is kinda thrown in there...
More Caltraps jumped out, and then the problem escalated. They outnumbered us 4 to 1, and we were surrounded. Now it was a fair fight, and that was not in our favour.

Fair fight, but not in your favor? Also, wtf is favour?

The Caltraps threw rocks around me in a circular motion, and I screamed for Tes to duck.

How do you throw a rock in a circular motion?

Several Caltraps were hit by their own teammates, causing them to charge enraged.

'charge', 'enraged'

I sighed, and laughed aloud at the stupidity of these things, pinched some Terri Powder, and threw it at the ground.

Remove the first 'and'.

Smoke filled the air immediately, our eyes were trained to deal with it, and I quickly snapped about 3 necks, left my other knife in a Caltrap's throat, and only one was there, and the smoke was clearing.

'our eyes were trained to deal with it' is thrown in there very sloppily. 'other knife' refrences a previous knife. The only other knife was used too long ago to have a refrence to it now. 'and only one was there' is very confuzing. One what? The second half of this sentence needs to be rewritten for clairity,

It grinned in that evil grin only a demonic being can do, and swung at me.

Remove the word 'in' at the begenning.

That was no Caltrap. Suddenly, I realized why this one's stomps were too quiet, too planned.

When it says 'I realized' you should have mentioned the quite, planned footsteps before.

This was a goblin. I quickly adapted my tactics, planning to use it's stupidity against it was no good, I feinted with my dagger, then slapped it with my sword.

The word 'since' before 'planning'.Period before 'I feinted'.

Enraged, it charged at me, and made it's first mistake. Never close the distance with an elf.

Remove the second comma.

I threw some powder in it's face, temporarily blinding it as the smoke filled it's body, and shoved the rest in it's mouth. Goblin's skin is too tough for these wimpy swords, I thought to myself, as the Goblin's stomach acid mixed with the smoke chemically and burned a hole through it's wind pipe and head.

This is going a little far with fantasy. Goblins are the offspring of a human and Caltrap, neither of which have super-tough skin, but the goblin does? And more than just the windpipe and head would burn.

It couldn't breathe, and eventually fell over. By then, the Caltraps were gone, scared that their leader was out.

'scared that their leader was out' reads funny.

It was a minor victory, but for a new recruit it was damn impressive.

The last it, shouldnt that be an 'I'?

If I didn't get a medal of intelligence for this, I don't know what I would get.

This doesnt seem much of an intellect thing, but whatever...



So howd I do? =D

Sorry it took so long, I had to eat dinner and do my chores somewhere in the middle of doing it...

[SniperAim]

What is your username(newline):

SniperAim

What experience do you have?:

I can write a good story. I got an A on a story I wrote.


Why do you want to join the Writer's Guild?

Because I think I can help this group out.

Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can
result in being barred for the group completely?:

Yes

What is the most important rule?:

Rule 1

[Eiliosdraye]

What is your username(newline):

SniperAim

What experience do you have?:

I can write a good story. I got an A on a story I wrote.


Why do you want to join the Writer's Guild?

Because I think I can help this group out.

Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can
result in being barred for the group completely?:

Yes

What is the most important rule?:

Rule 1
No .

Read the rules.

[Quantooce]

The captian shouting and you drawing your string would not be happening simotanuouly. (spelled that wrong)


The way 'again' is placed makes it sound like he shouded 'Aim!' again, instead of the again going to the 'shouted' as was intended.


I would remove the word 'now', or rearrange the sentence so that it reads more clearly.


This would have more power if the verbs were either all the same or all different, instead of 'laughed', 'watched', and 'watched'.


All of those commans are useless.


You say 'The Caltrap'. Nowhere did you specify any Caltrap though, so you should say "A Caltrap'.


Useless comma.


The phrase in the middle sounds a little off. And the word 'throat' should be sword. 'lifeblood' is an odd choice of words, it may be slang in the story, but since it is only used once it should be removed.


This is insanely cheesy and un-warlike.


No comma.


Two enemys yelling and changing each other? How cliche...


Instead of a comma, use a semi-colon.


This sentence feels out of place in this story, especially since it sisnt actually fall.


Remove the first comma.


Jumped over... what? And tripped it? It being the sword or he brute?
You need some clairifying in this sentence.


Useless comma, and who is Tes? (probably a series thing, but I didnt read anything else, and if this is a short story, you should clairify)


Take awhile to stab a disabled thing to death? (more of a probably series thing)


First comma is useless. should be a comma between 'down' and 'were'. And werent the Caltraps trying to take you guys out this entire time, or did they just decide to try and kill you?


No comma.


This is kinda thrown in there...


Fair fight, but not in your favor? Also, wtf is favour?


How do you throw a rock in a circular motion?


'charge', 'enraged'


Remove the first 'and'.


'our eyes were trained to deal with it' is thrown in there very sloppily. 'other knife' refrences a previous knife. The only other knife was used too long ago to have a refrence to it now. 'and only one was there' is very confuzing. One what? The second half of this sentence needs to be rewritten for clairity,


Remove the word 'in' at the begenning.


When it says 'I realized' you should have mentioned the quite, planned footsteps before.


The word 'since' before 'planning'.Period before 'I feinted'.


Remove the second comma.


This is going a little far with fantasy. Goblins are the offspring of a human and Caltrap, neither of which have super-tough skin, but the goblin does? And more than just the windpipe and head would burn.


'scared that their leader was out' reads funny.


The last it, shouldnt that be an 'I'?



This doesnt seem much of an intellect thing, but whatever...



So howd I do? =D

Sorry it took so long, I had to eat dinner and do my chores somewhere in the middle of doing it...

Congratulations, you are now a critic of the Writers Guild. Stay active, and you'll be fine. Your rank is New Blood. I'll advance you in rank when I see you are ready.

[Villyer]

Congratulations, you are now a critic of the Writers Guild. Stay active, and you'll be fine. Your rank is New Blood. I'll advance you in rank when I see you are ready.


Ok, cool.

Now do I just wait untill someone posts a story, or what?

[Quantooce]

Ok, cool.

Now do I just wait untill someone posts a story, or what?

I'm actually waiting for Eilios to set that up.

[Infinint]

This is the worst thing I've seen come out of pawn to date. Idiots criticing other idiots? Inability to use spell check? Unexplainable obsession with doublespacing? Seriously, what were they thinking.

[Eiliosdraye]

This is the worst thing I've seen come out of pawn to date. Idiots criticing other idiots? Inability to use spell check? Unexplainable obsession with doublespacing? Seriously, what were they thinking.
<3 you too!

[SneaK]

What is your username(newline):
SneaK



What experience do you have?:
I write lots of stories, test me if you wish.



Why do you want to join the Writer's Guild?
So other can read/critisize my work.



Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can result in being barred for the group completely?:
Yes.



What is the most important rule?:
Rule 3.

[Eiliosdraye]

What is your username(newline):
SneaK



What experience do you have?:
I write lots of stories, test me if you wish.



Why do you want to join the Writer's Guild?
So other can read/critisize my work.



Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can result in being barred for the group completely?:
Yes.



What is the most important rule?:
Rule 3.
Denied. Still not reading the rules, lol

[SneaK]

Denied. Still not reading the rules, lol
What is your username(newline):
Freezerburn (durr)

What experience do you have?:
I haven't failed AP/pre-AP English yet.

Why do you want to join the Writer's Guild?
I need an outlet to write through. The open-ended topics will help spark ideas for me. And I feel like being a part of the return of PG's General Discussion.

Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions (very hard to do) can result in being barred from the group completely?:
Yah (I edited some mistakes in the question)

What is the most important rule?:
Rule 3

Question: Then how'd he get in? :\

[troll]

What is your username(newline):
durp


What experience do you have?:

durp

Why do you want to join the Writer's Guild?

durp

Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can result in being barred for the group completely?:

durp

What is the most important rule?:
durp

Finally, post your application.
durp

[Toast]

Question: Then how'd he get in? :\

I'm still not in until I submit an entrance piece. Which I haven't. I've been busy/distracted.

[Eiliosdraye]

What is your username(newline):
durp


What experience do you have?:

durp

Why do you want to join the Writer's Guild?

durp

Are you aware being kicked out for breaking the rules, or failing one of the questions(very hard to do) can result in being barred for the group completely?:

durp

What is the most important rule?:
durp

Finally, post your application.
durp



durp'nied!

[Eiliosdraye]

1111 views, lol.


New idea for dimension xi14 lore. I need a good editor for this.

[SneaK]

1111 views, lol.


New idea for dimension xi14 lore. I need a good editor for this.

Me .

[Quantooce]

bumpbumpbump.

[Quantooce]

Bumping even moar.

[Quantooce]

Bumped for truth.