Poems

[Hamo]

Well im doing alot of this for english (poetry)
And i suck at it so i was wondering if you could give me ideas.
Also post your own poems if you want to.

Me and my mate made this one lol it's weird.


I am the Chinese cleaner
Clad in pink clingy gloves
Wiping down
Closed in a Westfield food court.
Any rubbish please?




Stuck in a low-paid job
Wearing a dowdy uniform
And comfy shoes
Inhaling chemical fumes.
Are you finished with that?




No, you don’t know my name
I am only another cleaner
Mopping up
Coca-Cola dams.
Can I take that for you?




Hearing the deadened radio
Listening to jabs of dialogue
I am their cleaner
Theirs.
Yes, madam, I’ll wipe that down for you.


Look at me!
Talk to me, please!
Don’t feel embarrassed. I am not a servant.
I eat lunch.
I go shopping.
I have a family at home.


We are similar.
It is only a job.

[DaMan]

What's with you and being 'the cleaner'?

[Pook]

Try to add some rhymes.

And where's the rhythm?

And the imagery I can imagine is cleaning.

[Hamzter]

garanteed A:

roses are red
violets are blue
god made me pretty
but wtf happend to you

[Hamo]

What's with you and being 'the cleaner'?

My friends mums a cleaner. So i said lets do it on your mum thinking he would say gtfo but he said ok lets do it on her being a cleaner. So yea thats how that happend.

Pooky not all poems have to ryme.

[Pook]

garanteed A:

roses are red
violets are blue
god made me pretty
but wtf happend to you

That poem is old and used a lot. The first two sentences had rhythm, but the last two don't. You can't have partially rhythm in a section.

[Calisniper13]

Alliteration will get j00 A's

[RaptorZ]

Roses are Red
Violets are Blue
A face like yours belongs in a zoo
dont worry ill be there too
not in a cage but laughing at you

I got this text on valentines day from a friend...

[DaMan]

lets do it on your mum
Hot damn. You're one horny boy.

[Hamo]

Hot damn. You're one horny boy.

-_-..
Any ways can you guys just rate the poem and give me ideas for a new one.
New one has to be about the bush....

(i bet daman will saying some thing on kangaroo's)

[DaMan]

(i bet daman will saying some thing on kangaroo's)
Well you really should write something about kangaroo's.

[wut]

Guaranteed A:

Roses are blue,

Violets are orange.

I couldn't think of anything that rhymes with orange.

[Timeline]

Internal anguish
Despair
Knowledge tarnished

Many deaths
Yang loses Ying

Blue turns to yellow
Friends turn to enemies
Fire to water

June is snowed in
Increased poverty
Losers weep
Lined with gold



Read the first letter of every line.

Yes, I made it up myself :p

[hawkman4321]

roses are red,
violets r blu,
i shot u in the head,
cuz every1 hates u
copyright 2002 on this poem btw

[Eiliosdraye]

Hamo can't come up
with a decent idea, so
we must make something.

[Hamzter]

Alliteration will get j00 A's

what about illiteration :P

guaranteed fail!

[Nightmare]

Hamo can't come up
with a decent idea, so
we must make something.

Smart, thats a haiku
I wish I had skill like that
Your just so dam smart.

:O! No idea if I spelt haiku right lawl. Hamo, your parents are making you right poetry?

[Hamo]

Smart, thats a haiku
I wish I had skill like that
Your just so dam smart.

:O! No idea if I spelt haiku right lawl. Hamo, your parents are making you right poetry?

No it's english work....
Isn't haiku like
7
5
7
Words or something :\

[SeasonalTNT]

Haiku is 5,7,5.

[Timeline]

And the 7,5,7 or whatever it is, is not words, but syllables.

[Quantooce]

He was so old his bones seemed to swim in his skin.
And when I took his hand to feel his pulse
I felt myself drawn in. It was as faint
as the steps of a child
padding across the floor in slippers,
and yet he was smiling.
I could almost hear a river
running beneath his breath.
The water clear and cold and deep.
He was ready and willing to wade on in.

[patriotsrock]

Nice poem, I hate writing them.

[Quantooce]

It's actually a pretty nice relaxer for me if I had a bad day.